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I saw your shoes the other day.  It was just a glimpse of them as you went through the door, but it was enough.  Funny, there must have been fifty people around.  It's been years and my subconscious can still pick you out of a crowd.

I wasn't sure it was you, though.  That's why I'm eating lunch on this bench.  I was checking to make sure it wasn't just my mind playing tricks on me, digging up old stuff I thought I buried behind everything I tried to make new in my life.  I used to follow guys in orange coats down the hallway, praying they'd turn around and be you.  I always felt foolish when they weren't, but it took me months to break the habit.  I wanted to make sure I wasn't suffering a relapse.

Of course, it was you.  God loves to pretend he's one of those strangers who have a nasty habit of returning things you tried your hardest to lose.  

You didn't see me.  But then, you never really did.  I was just the girl who sat a row to the left of you and two seats closer to the front of the room.  You were my first crush, not my first love.  Your job was to look pretty and never acknowledge my existence.  We only really talked once.  It was something about whether the thermometers in a lab experiment we were using were in Celsius or Fahrenheit.  I remember not knowing.

Seeing you again, I was worried that you would have the same effect on me that you used to.  That the blood would be cut-off from my brain and my IQ would dramatically drop by ten points just based on your proximity.

It didn't.  My foot itched a little bit and my back hurt from the bench, but my blood continued to circulate my body.  My IQ held steady, and I had to admit I was a little disappointed.

You were you, but you weren't.  Your face was thinner, hair shorter, and back straighter.  You'd grown up.  I'd grown up.

I saw you, and I went back to lunch.
Hmmm... I don't really know what to say about this.

Any corrections (tonal or grammatical) are totally appreciated!


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Holy smokes, a DD!
I have never loved the folks at #WritersInk more! They now sit between puppies and cookies, on the big list of things that make me happy. :glomp:

To all of the comments and :+fav:, I'll try my hardest to thank you properly. You just have to give me some time, 'kay?
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Daily Deviation

Given 2012-04-07
Me, You and Shoes by ~Glow-Stick-Empire The suggester says, "A short but sweet piece about growing up. It uses incidental details really well to hook the reader in; keeping the piece interesting and easy to relate to." ( Suggested by WritersInk and Featured by thorns )
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Jack-Gow Featured By Owner Edited Apr 14, 2015  Professional Writer
It feels as though this story had a plot twist, yet all you did was challenge the romantic story stereotype. This was refreshing, and I enjoyed reading it :)
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Rainfeather3 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I've felt the same way, I couldn't even talk right around him, and now he is just another person in my ( upside down, inside out) life.... I lik eknowing that others are in my shoes, makes me feel like I'm not as wierd and different as I thought, but then, I also know that I am my own person. Anyways, before I get to ranting, ( or ranting even more :P) Great work, keep it up!
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
Sorry about taking so long to respond, but I am so glad you could relate. It's helped me realize I'm not as weird and different as I thought too. ;)
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the-final-I Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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That's brilliant. So nice and so simple.
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
Aww, thanks! I'm glad you liked it!
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the-final-I Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I did. I did very much :)
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kittykruger Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
amazing! :la:
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
Thanks! :happybounce:
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ohmistermagazine Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Student Writer
Very relatable and very well-done. I've been in that situation myself, so I could almost picture my experience here, yet I distinctly felt the narrator's own experience. You did a great job of making this piece both incredibly universal and incredibly your own.

Props on the DD. It's quite deserved. :heart:

sorry if I'm incoherent, I'm half-asleep right now >.>
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
Thanks for such high praise, and thanks for taking the time to comment!
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Strudel--Cutie4427 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012   Writer
It's funny but that never happened with my first crush (Okay, first non-fictional crush -laughs-) but with my second oh boy did it ever. This is really well done and it fits many of us, making it easier to sympithise with and thus more interesting reading. Congrats on the DD
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
Thanks for commenting, I'm glad you could relate -- even if it was your second crush not your first!
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msfcatlover Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
*hand over my heart* Beautiful.
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
Oh, thanks!
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waffles301 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is exactly the way I feel right now. You never forget your first crush, the way they made your heart pound and your head spin. I keep looking for him, even though he'll never glance twice at me. But at the same time, there's always the assurance it's gotta get better. It's gonna get better.
This just describes my feelings exactly. Wonderfully. This definetely is worthy of a DD.
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
Don't worry it gets better, but don't forget to enjoy it while you can!
Thanks for the comment!
:tighthug:
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Kazuto-kun Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
A DD indeed, because this is awesome, and highly reflective of encountering a crush from your youth when you're in your adulthood. :nod: I can definitely relate to this... awhile ago, I found (on Facebook) a girl I knew back in my school days. I had a major crush on her back then... and funny, this part of my story syncs up with your vignette rather well: I used to encounter her all OVER the place in school! I was too shy to try and talk to her though; this was definitely just a crush.

Anyway, I found her again recently, and while I must say she's still quite pretty, I didn't have the same flustered feelings as I did when I was younger. As you put it, we both grew up. She actually has a child and a boyfriend (not the father) now, and since my school days, I've experienced real love... and it certainly wasn't the same as the crush I had on her.

In case it isn't obvious, I think this was rather excellent. :nod: You did well in capturing a slice of the human experience, in a genuine way. Congratulations on the DD!
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
Thank you so much for sharing your story. I had no idea that so many people, like yourself, would be able to relate to such a little moment in my life. It's kind of hard to believe.
Anyway, thank you for taking the moment to comment, it really means a lot.
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summersong123 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
good xx
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S-chama Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
Wow. Very relatable. The length and content fit so well, I think even one more sentance wouldn't work. Very well done!


(And don't most of us know that totally ignored feeling, *sigh*)
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
Oh, thank you for the comment! I was a little worried about the length but I'm glad you think it works.
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NataLeeSan Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
This is Josh...



ps. It's lovely ♥
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
Awww... thanks!
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Kawaii-Fruit-Cake Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is sooo good I favorited it! ~ ^__^
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
Thank you sooo much!
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Kawaii-Fruit-Cake Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
LOL your welcome. Such a cute little story :D
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heartdiver123 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Finally, a DD that I can relate to! ^^ But it's the truth. You always remember your first real crush, but there comes a point when they don't affect you anymore... *sigh*
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
Thanks for the comment (glad you can relate!) and :+fav:!
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Kitkatbar222 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
I cannot relate... at all. But I love this. I assume this is how some of my friends feel about their crushes... Anyway I'm framiliar with this kind of thing in many things I read... or even write myself. This is a lovely peice. I just adore the way you write. :)
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
Wow! I'm really happy that you like this even though you can't relate to it! Makes me feel like I did an okay job!
Thanks for the :+fav:!
:love:
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Kitkatbar222 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
Your welcome. :)
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MissLunaRose Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012   General Artist
I haven't had a crush yet, but now I understand what it feels like. Thank you! :huggle: You have helped my book.

By the way, the tone and voice are lovely here. The details are just perfect.
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
Oh my gosh, thank you!
I'm so glad I could help you out! You're too kind!
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MissLunaRose Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012   General Artist
You're welcome. :huggle:

Well, when one has never had a crush oneself, one needs to rely on outside sources... Yours is quite poignant.
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Good luck with your inbox. :D
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
Thanks, I'm going to need it. :XD:
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Alsdale Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is adorable.
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
Thank you!
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maywait98 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Been there, that's a great representation of it too! I like the use of IQ points dropping.
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
I'm glad you enjoyed that detail!
Thanks for the comment!
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KaanaDL Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
This is very good =) I could totally relate)
Well deserved Daily Deviation!
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
Thanks!
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GingerandSnow Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. A beautiful piece. Well deserved DD. :iconclapplz:
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
Ha, ha, I love that icon.

Thanks for the comment and :+fav:!
:love:
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GingerandSnow Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! Thanks for responding, I'm sure you've got a lot in your inbox right now. :D
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KJ-Illustration Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
What a wonderful piece! It was like a glimpse into my own mind, so relatable and familiar :heart:
Congrats on the DD - very well deserved! :clap:
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
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Oh, I'm glad you can relate!
Thanks for the :+fav:!
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KJ-Illustration Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Very welcome (: :heart:
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PoorEccentric Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Student Writer
This was really great. Man, you really captured what it's like to grow up gradually from the point when you can obsess over someone you've never really met to the point where they're just not that special anymore. Very, very good.
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012
That's so nice of you to say!
Now to go thank you for all the other comments, the other favs, and the watch!
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PoorEccentric Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Student Writer
Sorry I left so much for you to check. Whenever someone writes a really good DD I have to check all their stuff out in case they're good at writing. And I wasn't disappointed!
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