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I saw your shoes the other day.  It was just a glimpse of them as you went through the door, but it was enough.  Funny, there must have been fifty people around.  It's been years and my subconscious can still pick you out of a crowd.

I wasn't sure it was you, though.  That's why I'm eating lunch on this bench.  I was checking to make sure it wasn't just my mind playing tricks on me, digging up old stuff I thought I buried behind everything I tried to make new in my life.  I used to follow guys in orange coats down the hallway, praying they'd turn around and be you.  I always felt foolish when they weren't, but it took me months to break the habit.  I wanted to make sure I wasn't suffering a relapse.

Of course, it was you.  God loves to pretend he's one of those strangers who have a nasty habit of returning things you tried your hardest to lose.  

You didn't see me.  But then, you never really did.  I was just the girl who sat a row to the left of you and two seats closer to the front of the room.  You were my first crush, not my first love.  Your job was to look pretty and never acknowledge my existence.  We only really talked once.  It was something about whether the thermometers in a lab experiment we were using were in Celsius or Fahrenheit.  I remember not knowing.

Seeing you again, I was worried that you would have the same effect on me that you used to.  That the blood would be cut-off from my brain and my IQ would dramatically drop by ten points just based on your proximity.

It didn't.  My foot itched a little bit and my back hurt from the bench, but my blood continued to circulate my body.  My IQ held steady, and I had to admit I was a little disappointed.

You were you, but you weren't.  Your face was thinner, hair shorter, and back straighter.  You'd grown up.  I'd grown up.

I saw you, and I went back to lunch.
Hmmm... I don't really know what to say about this.

Any corrections (tonal or grammatical) are totally appreciated!


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Daily Deviation

Given 2012-04-07
Me, You and Shoes by ~Glow-Stick-Empire The suggester says, "A short but sweet piece about growing up. It uses incidental details really well to hook the reader in; keeping the piece interesting and easy to relate to." ( Suggested by WritersInk and Featured by thorns )
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Rainfeather3 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I've felt the same way, I couldn't even talk right around him, and now he is just another person in my ( upside down, inside out) life.... I lik eknowing that others are in my shoes, makes me feel like I'm not as wierd and different as I thought, but then, I also know that I am my own person. Anyways, before I get to ranting, ( or ranting even more :P) Great work, keep it up!
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
Sorry about taking so long to respond, but I am so glad you could relate. It's helped me realize I'm not as weird and different as I thought too. ;)
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the-final-I Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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That's brilliant. So nice and so simple.
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
Aww, thanks! I'm glad you liked it!
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the-final-I Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I did. I did very much :)
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kittykruger Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
amazing! :la:
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
Thanks! :happybounce:
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ohmistermagazine Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Student Writer
Very relatable and very well-done. I've been in that situation myself, so I could almost picture my experience here, yet I distinctly felt the narrator's own experience. You did a great job of making this piece both incredibly universal and incredibly your own.

Props on the DD. It's quite deserved. :heart:

sorry if I'm incoherent, I'm half-asleep right now >.>
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Glow-Stick-Empire Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
Thanks for such high praise, and thanks for taking the time to comment!
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Strudel--Cutie4427 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012   Writer
It's funny but that never happened with my first crush (Okay, first non-fictional crush -laughs-) but with my second oh boy did it ever. This is really well done and it fits many of us, making it easier to sympithise with and thus more interesting reading. Congrats on the DD
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